学生姓名:Louise,Ted
所在学校:宁波外国语学校
案例说明:Louise,Ted自2012年9月初二开始学习《典范英语》,经过一年多的学习,他们的写作能力和英语思维能力都得到显著提高。以下是他们在读完《典范英语》(7)Jungle Shorts后创作的故事片段,该文语言自然贴切,倒叙写作手法的运用大大增强了文章的趣味性,体现了学生的创作智慧。
This is me, a true me
作者:宁波外校 初一(7)班 Carrisa
Hello, everyone! My name is Otto. I’m from outer space. Do you know Mars? I’m just from there! There are some differences between me and Earth school students——I am green. Don’t be worried, my friends. Wait till I tell you why?
At the beginning of Mars’ history, we were green. This colour meant——Active Life. The entire world loved it. And it became the most famous and most popular colour in our real life.
On Mars, it has a little water. Of course, it isn’t enough for us. But we are green that we can make water for ourselves! We needn’t use the water from the space. Because we can make water as we breathe in the sun. Just like plants in earth, but we can think!
I was born on 2004 when the city I lived on Mars was celebrated her 60th birth. Now, I’m seven and a half. I’m a boy. I’m an out-going boy. And I like hunting for something. So, in my childhood, I always play tag and hide-and-seek with my friends. Ah~ huh! I still love playing games like those.
My favorite animal is ducks. Mars doesn’t have ducks, but we can see it from the videos from Earth. I love all the things from ducks; I usually flap my arms like wings with ‘quack, quack…’ My voice is good I think. But I can only do it when my parents are not at home. They don’t like me doing it one bit. They always tell me, ‘Please dear, you must be a he-man not a girly man just as you quack like a duck.’
My parents are very strict with me. They always require me to be NO. 1. But when I achieve their target, they never give me a gift or a smile. They think that is my duty. It doesn’t matter, I can do it! They both work in the Science Academy of Mars. They afford to build an industry Mars. It develops its specials. And now they are told to quest for new energy from the Earth. Because they love me, so they bring me out to the Earth. They want me to learn some knowledge. Now I study in Stardust International Middle School.
I love my class! That is a warm classroom! The head tells the other ones, ‘Please take care of our new students——Otto. And give him a hand if he needs it .’Jo is my best friend, forever.
That is me, a common Mars’ person, but a happy boy.
Otto
作者:宁波外校 初一(7)班 Helen
I am Otto. I’m seven and a half. I am not from Earth. I come from Mars. There are five people in my family: my parents, my younger sister and my grandmother. My father, my sister and I are green. But my mother and grandmother are not because they come from Earth. I can find things very fast and I’m good at finding things. So I often help my family find the things they lost. I can speak Mars language very well. But I can’t speak or understand the language so well. So I often make some mistakes. I lived on Mars with my family.
I don’t think my hometown is very beautiful. Because the sky there is black and I seldom see birds fly in it. The trees are very short and they are not green. My parents tell my sister and me: The people on Mars always ruin Mars. They catch animals and cut the trees. So the Mars becomes extinct soon. So our family comes to Earth. It’s nicer than Mars. I like Earth very much. When I go to the Earth school, I feel very well. Teachers and classmates are pretty friendly. There is a treasure hunt in class. Jo and I win. And so we get treasure chocolate. We share it with our friends. I ’m very happy.